I hear frollicks on the last line (beat after 'be,') and wonder at the 'k.' http://www.frollicks.com/#/home
No, srsly, in the music of these words, I read the last couplet in a traditional way and like that my mind's ear slips on your time twister in such a fashion.
Cheese crisps aside, I too like letter 'k' --it's one of those diving-board consonants that springs me into vowels. I'd use 'k' even oftener if I kould.
It might sound daft, but for me, everything comes back to water. The idea of cosmic water is far more appealing than thermodynamics of vacuum. A pleasure, Sir.
What a wonderful opening phrase ... love the idea of cosmohydraulics ... your artwork? Very nice ...
ReplyDeleteMost kind. Yes, my doodle today.
DeleteYou are a great doodler and writer of poems.
ReplyDeleteLoved this ....
Thank you, Margie. I guess we're Earthlings.
DeleteI hear frollicks on the last line (beat after 'be,') and wonder at the 'k.' http://www.frollicks.com/#/home
ReplyDeleteNo, srsly, in the music of these words, I read the last couplet in a traditional way and like that my mind's ear slips on your time twister in such a fashion.
Cheese crisps aside, I too like letter 'k' --it's one of those diving-board consonants that springs me into vowels. I'd use 'k' even oftener if I kould.
DeleteI was certain that was the kase.
DeleteA lovely verbal expression of a cosmic waterfall.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Emma.
DeleteJust an enjoyable post to read at the end of a weary day--thanks.
ReplyDeleteMy pleasure, and my privilege.
DeleteA great combination of delicate imagination and vivid expression. Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteKind Munir, thank YOU.
Delete(f)rollicks in our destiny....love that
ReplyDeleteBoth frolics and rollicks rhyme with Cosmohydraulics. Had to do it.
DeleteI love this beautiful poem, Geo...it is so deep and multi-layered.
ReplyDeleteAnd how your picture gives depth to the words.
Just perfect! :)
Ygraine, The poem loves you right back.
DeleteIt might sound daft, but for me, everything comes back to water. The idea of cosmic water is far more appealing than thermodynamics of vacuum. A pleasure, Sir.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Indigo! I too am happy to be a bag of mostly water and not a vacuum.
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